It shocks me beyond words to think of the horror that the girls in the Muzaffarpur children’s home in Bihar have faced. This poem cannot come close to expressing the damage that such sexual, mental and physical violence does. Nevertheless, I had to write about it. This poem is for those girls and their immeasurable strength.

‘Dear God, Why Did You Make The Night?’ by Shreya Manna
Dear God, why did you make the night?
Through the tiny window in my room, I know it is morning.
I hold onto it. Did you know I found a pansy flower on the floor today?
The petals curl so pretty in my hands. Like newborn baby lips.
The night swallows it all: the call of the birds, the rays of the sun,
The pansy flower. I can never make it stop.
Dear God, why did you make the night?
I found the pansy flower again. Just a little crunched up
In a corner of my bed. Was it plucked by someone?
Did it get hurt? The stem is so soft. The leaves could have grown.
I don’t want them to hurt. Please don’t let them get hurt, God.
Not even in the night when Uncle comes.
Dear God, why did you make the night?
In the morning, I saw big people put dead flowers around Uncle’s neck.
The petals are shrivelled. Rotting black at the ends.
But Uncle’s clothes are always white.
The colours make me scared. Do you know if the flowers cry?
How do they wipe away their tears?
I close my eyes and wait for the night to pass.
Isn’t that how flowers survive the night, God?
How else can I see the morning again, God?
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Hi!
I followed your link from the Monday sharing trail on fb. Your poem is beautiful despite being harrowing. You capture the juxtaposition of innocence and tragedy extremely well.
You asked for feedback.. my only thought for you to consider but by all means reject if you wish as it is just an idea. I think you could use your structure and punctuation to echo the ideas of the poem. For example, Sylvia Plath’s work showcases brilliant use of the full stop being used with real purpose and phrases/enjambment running over lines. It would be interesting for you, as an exercise to write the poem without using full sentences. Consider the words that you cannot lose and see what happens if you take the others away. Just an idea to experiment with!
Well done for joining the blogging journey. I look forward to reading more of your work. 😊
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Thank you so much for reading! I’m just getting started with poetry and there’s a long way to travel so every bit of feedback helps. I agree, experimenting with structure and punctuation is still somewhat unexplored territory for me. Looking forward to playing with it in my next poem. All the best with your blog too!
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Brilliant. We are all beginners and learners! ⭐️
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